Here's a snippet of another partial, temporarily titled 'Mark and Becca'. Becca's a dancer who's moved back home and is, at the moment, dodging the attentions of the orthopedic surgeon Mark Erikson. Becca's brother Bob is still holding onto a grudge against the Erikson brothers for the way they treated him in high school. Mark has long forgotten the feud, but Bob's determination to keep them apart is, of course, backfiring. Especially now they've teamed up to win a ballroom dancing contest.
"Mark, Paul, and Joe
thought they ruled the school." Bob picked up his newspaper again.
"But Mark was the worst. Always had girls hanging on him, just because he
made the State finals in wrestling. And now I guess he's some kind of hot shot
orthopedic surgeon." He rattled the paper again and looked at Becca.
"So stay away from him. He's bad news, just like that asshole you shacked
up with."
"That asshole gave me a
pretty good boy upstairs." Becca mentally counted to ten. Zach's father was usually a topic she
avoided. But the sting of the breakup was still raw.
"How the hell can you
defend him?" The newspaper hit the floor. "He took every dime you
made; maxxed out your credit cards; and left you for someone else." Bob's
face was red. "You're home for a month and what happens? Big Shot
Ericson's all ready to pounce on you. Christ, Rebecca! I knew Mom should have
been stricter on you."
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6 comments:
I take it this guy talking is her brother...maybe older brother. He reminds me of one of my secondary characters. It's sweet how he just wants to protect her...even though his protection might be unwanted at the time.
LOL....yes, Bob's upset because this is the 2nd time she's encountered Mark. 1st time was at church; this time he happened to be the on-call surgeon when Becca's son Zach cracked the growth plate in his ankle during baseball practice.
I immediately liked Bob. And felt compassion for Rebecca. Great job conveying so much emotion in a few short paragraphs.
Uh oh...great conflict here!
Oh...ooooh. intrigued. Why the bitterness? Why the conflict?
Thanks ladies! And Kerrianne, Bob has ideas about families which are throwbacks to the 50's. Becca feels 'stifled', but yet needs to get back on her feet.
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