Thursday, October 25, 2012

Final Installment of BWSNBN:)

Are you cheering?  Weeping/sniffing?  Are you going to miss your Wednesday dose of witty sarcasm?  (LOL!)

I reread the final two chapters last night and found some things I'd missed the first time (that's what happens when it's 11pm and you're rushing to finish a critique!), plus my anger returned at the way it ended.  But again, I'm getting ahead of myself.

Ch. 25:
A leaves Georgia; C headed back in previous chapter because of a 'situation'.  A immediately remembers the last 'situation' was her virginity.  Yeah, when I'm dating a businessman and a 'situation' calls him back to the office, this would be my assumption also-wait-no, it wouldn't.  It would mean something's gone wrong with whatever business he's doing at the moment.  And then A mulls over everything during the pre-flight, even getting paranoid over his 'stilted manner' during texts.  He's OCCUPIED, you dolt!  Give the man some space while he deals with his 'situation'.  And maybe this is just the fact I'm 25 years older than this heroine...when I was 23, I dated a guy whose business picked up a month after we began dating.  Instead of being understanding after so many broken dates, I looked around for someone else.  Nothing drives a man away faster than a clingy female....

Pg 476:  She 'suddenly notices' the empty seat beside her and wonders if C bought it so she couldn't speak to anyone? freaking paranoid is she?  Whenever I fly, I'm thankful when the seat next to me is empty; it means I'm not going to be crowded/cramped, and especially if I'm not in the mood to talk to anyone, it means PRIVACY!

Pg 478:  She enters the apartment and he's saying into the phone, 'No trace...keep me informed.'  Even I immediately deduce someone he cares about it missing, and from his agitation, I think it's Mrs. R.  But apparently she's too stupid to catch on.

Pg 483:  She's obsessing over what he's bought her so far (clothes, car, computer, phone) and thinks the next thing will be her own condo 'and then I'll really be his mistress.''re sleeping with him; you already are.  Mistress/girlfriend, same thing.   At least, it is to me.  A's read the classics; any woman who slept with a man was called his 'mistress', not 'girlfriend'.

Pg 488:  I have a question about the 'hard, unyielding mattress' in his playroom.  Aren't they supposed to be comfortable?

Pg 493:  Post-flogging/coitus, he's rubbing her shoulders and she asks again about what she said in her sleep.  And he puts her at ease by mentioning a dream, and that she missed him and wanted more.'  So instead of keeping her paranoid thoughts to herself (and this might just be a case of speaking w/o thinking) and saying 'Okay', she blurts out in relief, "Is that all?"  And then wishes he'd leave the issue alone?  OMG....if you want to keep something secret, don't leave clues you were thinking something else!

Ch. 26:
Pg 503:  NOW she finds the courage to be honest with him and let him know how she feels about the whole spanking/flogging/punishment?  And he BEGS her not to leave him?  If he's a Dom, he's not a very good one.

Pg 504-6:  I'd like to know what the hell possessed her to rationalize 'if I can take the kind of 'punishment' he'd like to give me, then I'll stay with him; if not, then it's over'.  WTH....???  You've stated you don't like pain, but now you're willing to try it?  'Just to see if I can take it'?  I had this same reaction to another BDSM book, in which the heroine 'escapes' from her sadist Master, but then agrees to let him 'punish' her IN PUBLIC, to get him to leave her alone.  I'll never understand that kind of logic.

Pg 506-7:  So now she's finally upset and angry, and wondering what the hell prompted her to do that.   (My inner cheerleader is finally doing backflips and saying 'YES!  It's about f***ing time!  Oh crap....this book is affecting the way I critique!  Molly runs screaming down the hall....)

Pg 509:  She tells him she loves him; he can't accept it and suddenly it dawns on her....they really are two different people from different worlds (didn't we establish that back in Ch 2 or 6 or 10??  Geez, this girl's a slow learner!) and decides she needs to leave.  And then does something really stupid.  She gives him back everything he's given her:  Phone, computer, and wants the money so she can buy her car back.  Keep everything, idiot!

Pg 512:  She has a brief moment of wanting a a rewind:  'If I'd kept my mouth shut, we'd be having sex on the piano...'

And on Pg. 514, she's left him, and grieving.  My comment on the last page?  NOW she's left him?  When he's in a panic over the 'situation' with a missing person?

I'm tempted to read the next book, just to see if his 'situation' gets resolved!

So now, do you want me to continue with book #2?

Tomorrow's Flashback will be Halloween 2002.  Come back and find out what my child had the audacity to wear for a costume!


Vonnie Davis said...

Molly, you are a better person than I. I wasn't able to get beyond chapter 4 or 5, the writing was so bad and the heroine TSTL. Maybe some day I'll read more of it, but my inner editor just wants to scream as I read it.

Your post was so entertaining, I wish I'd taken the time to read them all along. Dumb me...too busy, as always. Anyway, well done, hon. Yay you!!!

Molly Daniels said...

Highlighter and Pen. I bought two copies of this book; one to use as a marketing device on my display table at signings (a sign reads 'If you've read this, you'll like Kenzie Michaels') and the other to read and mark up to my heart's content:)

And yes, you would not believe the women who run up to me at signings and say 'Ooooh, wait til you get to book #3!'

(GAG) But now I'm kinda wanting to find out about what happened to Mrs. R....

Davee said...

I admire you for reading it. I just can't seem to do it. I've heard way too much negative from writers I like----and also, from my friends who I know dearly! I liked your synopsis though, made me giggle.

Cara Marsi said...

Molly, I look forward to your critiques. I don't want to put you through more torture, but I'd love for you to continue so we can read your witty critiques.

Amber Skyze said...

I give you credit for suffering through the book. I don't think I could have. Thanks for sharing...

Tessie Bradford said...

You're a real trooper to have finished this book, Molly! I will greatly miss your postings but would hate to see you torture yourself further.
If it helps, my daughter fell for trying book #2 for the same reason. She tells me she regrets her decision.

Marianne Stephens said...

You're a trouper to get through the book. I've stopped reading some mid first chapter!
Your comments are wonderfully witty and entertaining...please read the next book!

Fiona McGier said...

Thanks for "taking one for the team" by reading this so I don't have to! Your choice as to whether or not you think you can stand any more. But your comments were amusing. Most of the women I know who read it look around to be sure no one is listening then they confide they skipped the sex scenes because they were boring. In an erotic book?!?
Isn't that like a comedy not being funny? Or a tragedy having no blood and no deaths? Erotica with no spark? And yet this is a best-seller. Heavy sigh.

Janice Seagraves said...

You've been real good sticking it out with this book, but don't torture yourself trying to reading book 2.

Well, only if you want to. I can always use a laugh.


Molly Daniels said...

Thanks everyone! I'm glad I brightened up your day with book #1. Bought Book #2 yesterday...I want to find out if I was right about the 'situation'.

And maybe she got better with the 2nd book? Find out next week:)

Anonymous said...

Molly, you're braver than me for trying to trudge through the second one.

All I can say is I guess her cliffhanger worked?