Thursday, December 13, 2012

Part 5 of the Sequel to That Book

First of all, let me preface this by saying I'm so tired of the word 'smirk', it nearly turned me off another author's work!  I feel if I see it pop up one more time in another book, I'm going to scream and hurl it across the room, no matter if it's by an author I LIKE!  I apologize in advance to any other authors out there.  But I'm only on Book #2 of That Series, and I may never use 'mutter' or 'whisper' ever again, and woe if I ever find 'smirk' in one of my own books, or one I'm reading.

Ch. 9:
Pgs 197-202:  Enough with the -ly words!  My editor would have fit.

Pg 203:  Why is she put out because the valet compliments C on his car?  I don't get it.  Also, how is they're buying a new car on a SUNDAY?  Or is it only in Indiana the car dealerships are closed that day?  Or did he call ahead and pull some strings?  Otherwise, I find this hard to believe they randomly pull into the lot, and the dealership is open.  Like I said, this doesn't happen around here.

Pg 208:  Is she choosing the same thing as he for lunch in order to please him, or is this the downhill slide of 'You choose for me because I have no brain in my head'?

Pg 209:  I guess I need to brush up on my boat knowledge.  I thought a catamaran was a flat sailboat-thingy.  But what she's describing sounds more like a large sailboat/yacht.

Pg 212:  She's watching C and a member of his crew work with knots and suddenly she's wondering if M knows some good rope tricks too, then flushes at the forbidden thought.  I get this, but how does she know she's 'flushing'?

Pg 215:  Another 'I have the most ridiculous grin on my face'...can she see her reflection somewhere?

Pgs 216-20:  Skipped, due to boring sex scene.  I skimmed it, but other than the 'ho-hum' factor, nothing really to say.

Ch. 10:
Pg 222:  Why is she suddenly 'crabby' after helping him pack the sails away?  Unless she's overly tired from all that lovemaking.

Pg 224:  Why is C suddenly 'jealous' of her interest in JT?  More on this in a bit.

Pg 225:  Suddenly shy around M, because 'he must know what we were doing when he went ashore'.  Gee, you think?  I can hear C:  "Make yourself scarce so we can be alone for an hour.'

Pg 226-31:  I enjoyed reading their conversation, and the finally getting-to-know-you-better stuff.  But now it turns heavy, as she questions the fact he's changing for her.

Pg 232:  So A flirts with JT, then C 'makes her feel like a child'.  HUH???

Pgs 233-5:  I thought this entire conversation was taking place in front of the walk-in closet.  But then C leads her out of it.  So a little confusing here....

Pgs 237-40:  They're playing pool.  Isn't there a standard size for pool tables?  Yet she states "I don't think I've ever seen one so large...'

And great way to end the chapter.  Oooh, will he sink the 8-ball, then spank her and take her on the pool table?  I can hardly wait to read what happens in Ch 11.

And I sincerely hope my sarcasm is coming across in that last statement!

I was dealt a personal shock the past two days.  Found out a former boyfriend's mother took it upon herself to play God and interfere with our then-budding relationship.  If she hadn't have interfered, the summer of 1985 would have definitely been better for me.  So I wasn't too far off the mark when I wrote All She Ever Wanted back in July 2008, lol!

Going to karaoke tonight and singing some loud, angry songs.  I'll report back tomorrow.

Currently Reading:  Finished Laura by Hilary Norman, and loved it:)  Now reading The Joy Luck Club by Amy Tan.  This one is interesting, and different from The Kitchen God's Wife. 

E-book-wise, I'm still on The Renovated Heart by Jean Joachim, and this one is a Definite Recommended Read:)  I'm about 3/4 of the way through it:)  Just not doing a great deal of reading on the Kindle while I have two sacks full of paperbacks.  I really need to alternate mediums...

Tomorrow:  Memories of my 17th birthday:)  Have a good day!


Anonymous said...

Catamarans are categorized as: "A type of multihulled boat or ship consisting of two hulls, or vakas, joined by some structure, the most basic being a frame, formed of akas. Catamarans can be sail- or engine-powered."

I will tell you that when I lived in Port O Conner Texas {as a early-mid teen} one of the guys at the docks had a huge catamaran that was the size of a cruise ship!

I used to help clean it. It was definitely a learning experience.

P.S. Do you intend to read the 3rd book of that series?
I'd think by now you've had enough torture.

Molly Daniels said...

LOL! Thanks for the info Kitty:) And yes...I'll struggle through book #2 and then tackle #3. You'll notice I'm not picking on every little thing now:)

Marianne Stephens said...

Car dealers are not open on Sunday as far as I know...good catch!
Love your comments...keep reading!

Cara Marsi said...

Thank you, Molly, for doing this. I don't know much about boats, but I spent some time on my friend's sailboat and the way you describe this, it sounds more like a sailboat than a catamaran. I thought car dealers were open on Sunday. I'll have to check that out. It's obvious James did no research if she's wrong about the catamaran and the car dealers, but why should she do research? Her readers don't seem to care. Do you know she's one of Barbara Walters' Ten Most Fascinating People of 2012?

Such a shame about your old boyfriend and his maniupulative mother.

Molly Daniels said...

@Marianne: I read that and it was a HUGE red flag!

Molly Daniels said...

@Cara: See Kitty's comment about the catamaran:) And yes, I'm curious enough to want to watch that episode (unless I've already missed it??).

LOL...I was shocked, then hurt, then spent an entire day on FB with him, working through everything. Then unearthed my diary and discovered my memory was extremely faulty, and we were better off w/o each other in the long run. Trying to remember back 27 years...I only remembered the pain, not what took place several weeks before and after. It was a learning experience for sure.

Fiona McGier said...

I'm not real big on wondering "what if" about past relationships. They are in the past so leave them there. If you are happy with the now relationship, so much the better. If not, why go back to something that caused so much pain already? Let it go...

When I read about the $5,000 bonus that everyone at Random House was sharing because of this little trilogy that no one could be bothered to even EDIT, my head almost exploded! Because now of course, we will be treated to ENDLESS novels about tortured rich over-bearing alpha-men and-clueless ingenues, with a hint of naughty sex so you can say, "Gosh, how icky" while you read every word. Sigh...

There is no justice in the world. If there was, the author would be waiting tables to pay her bills and I'd get real royalties checks that were worth cashing.

Molly Daniels said...

That's CRAZY! $5K in bonuses? Geez....