Still too many 'whispers', 'murmurs' and 'flush'-ing going on.
Pg 252: If she's looking at her fingers, how does she know he's put the champagne bottle on the table????
And if she's soooo concerned about getting tipsy, stop drinking it! Or at least slow down.
Pg. 255: Showing my ignorance here....what the hell is 'anal fisting'? If it's what I think it is, how the hell can a fist get in there?
Pg. 256: Why does she 'whisper' instead of 'gasp' when he mentions 'training'? And I'm about to smack her 'inner
Pg 258: She thinks he's bossy now....wait til she gets in the playroom! And I'm soooooooo glad she 'blanches' at the thought of caning! (Yeah, that doesn't excite me either.)
Pg 260: I'm sorry; I find the fact he's willing to compromise a little out of character for a Dom....unless I'm wrong here.....
Pg 265: If he 'dips' his finger, then puts it into his own mouth, how the hell does she know she tastes salty? There's no mention of her 'tasting' herself. And I take issue with the 2nd half of this entire page. Would a Dom REALLY behave like that?
Pg 271: Why would a doctor make a house call for a female exam? This makes NO freaking sense whatsoever.
Pg 273: She's about to get her first spanking. Again, she has a choice. Use your damn safe word or get the hell away from him!
Pg 280: Oh yeah....act like an abused woman and say you fell down! And why does K not mention the new car in front of the house? And why does she care if C does or does not approve if his brother moves in with K?
Pg 285: I find it hard to believe he would return, just to pacify her.
I was so disgusted after I read this on Friday, I haven't touched it at all since. I might read the next two chapters tomorrow. The good news? Since I'm halfway through it, I have been able to discuss it with others and tell them WHY I think it's horrible. And yes, I've even had one or two women agree with me! Readers, not writers.